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Post by Ransu on Sept 21, 2007 22:03:21 GMT -5
First poem I made by myself Breaking
Touch the broken heart
As the rain touches ones bare skin
Flowing warmth from ones kiss
breaking the happy soul
The kiss heals the broken heart
The body phases away with passing time
Light bears between two lovers
Breaking more then what's expected |
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Post by Shy on Sept 21, 2007 22:23:06 GMT -5
 wow. pretty good. it makes enough sense to me. |
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Post by Raku on Sept 21, 2007 22:25:43 GMT -5
*nods* Very good! It makes sense, but doesn't have to as long as it means something to you.
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Post by Shy on Sept 21, 2007 22:28:19 GMT -5
thats very true
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Post by Ransu on Sept 22, 2007 19:15:33 GMT -5
Another poem, not as good as the first though (Don't have a ,title lol)
Blood drawn vampires
feeding on healthy blood
Red moonlight
Piercing the unhappy heart
Of the common soul
Angels bow
Before the heaven's master of all light
The sudden tear of one's joy
Is desolved away from ones sadness
Reborn death flys in the night sky |
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Post by konoka on Sept 22, 2007 19:26:52 GMT -5
Spooky! It's vampiric! Me likey! ^^ And I understand it. ^^
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Post by Ransu on Sept 22, 2007 19:31:44 GMT -5
Yay!*hugs her ans gives her a cookie*
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Post by konoka on Sept 22, 2007 19:40:04 GMT -5
*hugs back and gives cookie to Jared who looks confused* Yay for me!
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Post by Shy on Sept 22, 2007 20:07:31 GMT -5
wow. u sure ur only an amateur? ur pretty good. i like the vampire 1 a lot! its really good!
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Post by Raku on Sept 22, 2007 20:21:52 GMT -5
It is lovely. Once again, an amazing poet. I love the vampy one, and it is very clear.
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Post by Ransu on Sept 22, 2007 20:24:33 GMT -5
Yay *gives her a cookie aswell*
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Post by Raku on Sept 22, 2007 20:26:03 GMT -5
*splits the cookie in half and gives one half to Tag* Yummy! My champion horse gets some!
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Post by Aster on Sept 22, 2007 20:28:32 GMT -5
great poem!
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Post by Ransu on Sept 22, 2007 20:30:44 GMT -5
Thanks Deidara, Wanna cookie?
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Post by Aster on Sept 22, 2007 20:36:58 GMT -5
No thanks... I had plenty at that party! And I played Poker with adults there!
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wow. pretty good. it makes enough sense to me.
